Hello, I'm Hwirin Park.
Concept
Broken Infinity
: Life and afterlife are same like a infinite clock. But I want to change and design my life. His life looks boring, so I would like to broke his infinite life clock and make my own.
First version
Second version
I think your second week poster better illustrates the broken clock or reconstructing a clock. Looks like the pieces are moving and the hands of the clock really help
ReplyDeleteYes, the second one feels more like a clock than just a pie chart
ReplyDeleteand I can feel the movement that the small pieces are coming out, and the whole thing is breaking
the broken clock is really nice. i can really see it is a clock being smashed. but im not so sure about the round line on the top left corner, the one near the longer hand, i think you can make that into the big types too, instead of a perfect round line
ReplyDeleteI really like the 2nd poster that you've done. It really shows the concept of a broken clock. Maybe if you want it to be infinite, you can break from the page as well
ReplyDeleteI think the second poster give me a really strong feeling about life is a infinite clock and you want to broke it. Maybe the typeface shooed have more movement because 'sleep 30 years' you using very big type, other text didn't give me different feeling.
ReplyDeleteI think your second poster is better than your first poster. It is more strong and active.
ReplyDeleteBut I agree with Linxi. I think it may look better to change the scale of your typeface.
Second one is much stronger than the first one, It looks like unordered but it is actually gestalt.
ReplyDeleteI can see your concept clearly and I like the strong feeling of your poster.
ReplyDeleteBut I think the text "sum" on upper left side is little bit unreadable.
I really quite like your 2nd poster. I definitely get that it's a clock being smashed from the center. I agree with the others about the "sleeping for 30 years" being a little awkward. Maybe have the "sleeping for," or at least just have the "for" be broken up too. The kerning of "30 years" seems a bit unnatural as well bc "sleeping for" is so cramped right next to it. Could slice up the letters, since the type is big/bold. Maybe play around more with the spacing and have it seem like the letters are all breaking away with the same force. You did a great job with the bottom half. I don't know about the others, but I had no problem reading that the top left hand type was the title, and think it looks cool the way it is. Maybe just make the "M" the same as the "S" and "U" to make it more clear.
ReplyDeleteI really quite like your 2nd poster. I definitely get that it's a clock being smashed from the center. I agree with the others about the "sleeping for 30 years" being a little awkward. Maybe have the "sleeping for," or at least just have the "for" be broken up too. The kerning of "30 years" seems a bit unnatural as well bc "sleeping for" is so cramped right next to it. Could slice up the letters, since the type is big/bold. Maybe play around more with the spacing and have it seem like the letters are all breaking away with the same force. You did a great job with the bottom half. I don't know about the others, but I had no problem reading that the top left hand type was the title, and think it looks cool the way it is. Maybe just make the "M" the same as the "S" and "U" to make it more clear.
ReplyDeleteI really like your second poster, it does reveal your concept of broken time successfully, and at the same time I'm not sure weather you aimed for it but it looks like broken time's flying over the space. nice.
ReplyDeletelike the look of the second one, just too many tiny stuff around feel a little distract
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