I think this weeks poster is confusing to me because I'm wondering what the little bit of stuff is in there and why its floating away? Sand I believe would fall straight down.
You might be able to create the feeling of empty with just putting the whole story at the bottom of the hourglass, like it has already finished. It's the end and the top is empty. I think it will be a stronger contrast between full and empty.
I like the way you minimalized the shape of hourglass just using a simple line. I think the line and black background are making great contrast.
But it would be more sense if you fill the bottom part with types rather than omitting it. It would more emphasize the emptiness of upper part. Also, I think showing the falling types is good because it gives me a feeling of movement.
the simplicity of the hourglass shape is nice, but the type is too small and too little, maybe u dont even need to shape, just keep the text as sand in the middle and falling down, that way it would could an abstract shape of the hour glass using type
I agree with Michiko, I understand you would like to write less to make it more empty. But if you use her idea on the bottom of the glass, it will represent that it is already empty.
The second poster is really graphic. However it is difficult to read. I like your concept, I think the first one 'sum' the typeface was really strong, you should keep it. I don't think the empty is bad, I feel about life is more vacancy.
I also agree with Michiko, I like your idea and the way you minimized those type. I think if you wanna to show "empty", why don't you get rid of those lines instead of using type as the shape of hourglass.
I like the movement and sand-like shape of the texts. Something empty would be seen more clearly if shown through contrast of empty area and fully stuffed area. I think you can try that by outlining the shape of hourglass through negative & positive space instead of a line.
I agree with having most of the story be at the bottom of the hourglass to illustrate how our time is done/spent. Maybe have a trail of type still coming down from the upper half to show that it's in the process of emptying.
Second poster looks really nice. but I believe according to what olga said, we should place all text on our posters. so, how about you draw your hourglass using texts? and make inside empty?
All good and different suggestions! I also think that second shape is much better and I like that you didn't use the previous very heavy typeface because the style of your poster has changed. I like a very cold look of almost IKEA instructional manual how to live your life. Powerful! I also like that theres is no space for the sand to go through—it is a totally closed space—feels like some devilish joke. There is a lot tragic irony in this poster. Somebody suggested to turn the line into a line of type and leave the middle empty. Great! but it will be difficult to read such a long continuous line of type. I would suggest two versions: 1. to reduce the image of the hourglass seriously, create a rectangular box out of bold looking type to "hold" and image inside of it. (type could be all caps serid or Sans serif . You can read first left side of text and then—right side. 2. To make the hourglass a little smaller, have a black background around it and long lines of small type on the bottom of the glass as if "life is gone" as Elaine said. You are almost there.
I think the story has to be there?
ReplyDeleteI think this weeks poster is confusing to me because I'm wondering what the little bit of stuff is in there and why its floating away? Sand I believe would fall straight down.
You might be able to create the feeling of empty with just putting the whole story at the bottom of the hourglass, like it has already finished. It's the end and the top is empty. I think it will be a stronger contrast between full and empty.
I like the way you minimalized the shape of hourglass just using a simple line.
ReplyDeleteI think the line and black background are making great contrast.
But it would be more sense if you fill the bottom part with types rather than omitting it. It would more emphasize the emptiness of upper part. Also, I think showing the falling types is good because it gives me a feeling of movement.
the simplicity of the hourglass shape is nice, but the type is too small and too little, maybe u dont even need to shape, just keep the text as sand in the middle and falling down, that way it would could an abstract shape of the hour glass using type
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ReplyDeleteI agree with Michiko, I understand you would like to write less to make it more empty. But if you use her idea on the bottom of the glass, it will represent that it is already empty.
ReplyDeleteThe second poster is really graphic. However it is difficult to read. I like your concept, I think the first one 'sum' the typeface was really strong, you should keep it. I don't think the empty is bad, I feel about life is more vacancy.
ReplyDeleteI also agree with Michiko, I like your idea and the way you minimized those type. I think if you wanna to show "empty", why don't you get rid of those lines instead of using type as the shape of hourglass.
ReplyDeleteI like the movement and sand-like shape of the texts.
ReplyDeleteSomething empty would be seen more clearly if shown through contrast of empty area and fully stuffed area. I think you can try that by outlining the shape of hourglass through negative & positive space instead of a line.
I like the way you simplified your concept to visual! but it looks it is going to be almost empty, not really empty.
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ReplyDeleteI agree with having most of the story be at the bottom of the hourglass to illustrate how our time is done/spent. Maybe have a trail of type still coming down from the upper half to show that it's in the process of emptying.
ReplyDeleteSecond poster looks really nice. but I believe according to what olga said, we should place all text on our posters. so, how about you draw your hourglass using texts? and make inside empty?
ReplyDeleteAll good and different suggestions! I also think that second shape is much better and I like that you didn't use the previous very heavy typeface because the style of your poster has changed. I like a very cold look of almost IKEA instructional manual how to live your life. Powerful! I also like that theres is no space for the sand to go through—it is a totally closed space—feels like some devilish joke. There is a lot tragic irony in this poster.
ReplyDeleteSomebody suggested to turn the line into a line of type and leave the middle empty. Great! but it will be difficult to read such a long continuous line of type.
I would suggest two versions:
1. to reduce the image of the hourglass seriously, create a rectangular box out of bold looking type to "hold" and image inside of it. (type could be all caps serid or Sans serif . You can read first left side of text and then—right side.
2. To make the hourglass a little smaller, have a black background around it and long lines of small type on the bottom of the glass as if "life is gone" as Elaine said.
You are almost there.
Good idea, just hard to read, it's almost unreadable
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