John McGough - SUM poster advice.

Hello everyone, This is John from our Thursday afternoon class. I submitted my SUM poster, but we did not get a chance to fully critique it. I was told that the concept was too drastically different from the original poster, therefore there were more things about the poster that needed to be analyzed. Professor Olga had only stated that the poster was too busy, that there are now 3 main points you need to look at in the poster, and it makes it too busy. The Message had changed however between the last class and the newest class. What I took away from the SUM story was a sense of "Identity". I wanted to represent Life being your Identity, and the branches of life would be the choices and decisions in life that were represented in the SUM story. But please, any advice will help me. The Blue Poster was the Original poster, and the Black and white one is the one I designed last week. 

Seong Yeop Sim

My concept is candle.
Life will be melted like a candle.

Liang Dai

My concept is planed, like the video game Sim City.  

Black and white

Color Version 1

I tried to make a night version felling by only using deep blue and bright yellow.

Color Version 2

Lei

I took some advices and changed mine a little bit.
My concept is life is a circle but there's something missing in this one.

I kept the circle and type around it, i enlarged the type so it's easier to read now and i made the tail of each sentence scattered just to make it feel like there's many space between and feel like there's something missing in between. and the whole circle don't look complete because of this.

New poster:

Last weeks:

Michiko

We didn't get a chance to look at my work last class, so I was wondering if you guys could give me any feed back.

My concept is :

“...the thought is blissful: a life where episodes are split into tiny

swallowable pieces, where moments do not endure...”

Life is manageable because you do not have to do everything at once. Our attention span is short and as a result we can only do the same task for a short period of time before the value of the experience decreases. It is important to live in the moment and change to a new task when the experience starts to lose its value, because having that ability is what makes life so great. 

This last week I was trying to add emotion and depth to my poster. Make the visual hierarchy more clear and make the whole poster feel more complete. 

last weeks : 

This one is a lot closer to what I had last week tried adding an off white background to help it feel like one.

I felt like sand relates to my concept because it's little bits that can be put together and rearranged, also the feeling is very calm and pleasant. (not sure if using a photograph is allowed though) In the first one I was using it to bring your eye to the bringing, so you know where to start and the second one to bring your attention to the title of the short story. 

This one I used a bubble background, which is a natural and organic pattern to contrast the very organized and structured text. I was hoping to add the calm and happy emotion to my poster. 

For this piece I was trying to find the simplest way to add the emotion to my poster, using the emotion that the color. 

Thank you! 

Ara CHo

Hello, I am Ara

My concept is Big numbers in life circle.

HyejinKim

   

                             

                              Hello.

                              I am HyejinKim.

                              My concept is "life is nothing"

                              I thought that  life is nothing like disappearing smoke or wind.

                           

Lei Sum

Hello, I am Lei

My concept is life is circle, but there's something lacking in this one.

Saenansul Chung

After reading sum, I felt a clear devision between time that is meaningful and meaningless. Therefore, my concept is a devision between time.

I defined meaningful time as what shows one's emotional connection to the environment. and I classify this as the time of liveliness. What rises above. Because, in life, what makes us feel alive, is not such mare physical activities as doing laundry or calculating tips, but whether it is such pleasant moment as the moments of pure joy or such painful experiences as heart break, we feel alive when we actually feel something. 

therefore, for opposite, I classified the rest of the activities mentioned in the paragraph as the time of death. it doesn't mean the literal death of the subject of that time , but death of the time itself. Because, these are the time that does not gets the meaning by itself but just there to fill the gap between time and to make those time of liveliness more meaningful.

Elaine's SUM poster

Hello, I'm Elaine

My concept is that when you are born, you are dealt a certain hand of cards that gives your life meaning. When you die, these cards are returned, reshuffled, regrouped, and given back to you in a systematic, meaningless order events.


Last week

This week

hye ri hyun_SUM

Hello
I am Hye Ri Hyun
My concept is empty.
I tried to make people feel empty by using hourglass and omitted the content of the story.

<First version>

<Second version>

Hello, I am Ken

My concept is that "life is meaningless".

We are just like the chicken. No matter what we did in present, that does nothing to out afterlife.

First version 

Second versions

Hwirin Park_SUM

Hello, I'm Hwirin Park.

Concept 
Broken Infinity
: Life and afterlife are same like a infinite clock. But I want to change and design my life. His life looks boring, so I would like to broke his infinite life clock and make my own.


    First version

    Second version

heather lee_SUM poster

Hi, I am Heather lee

My concept is interpretation of time.

my reaction to “SUM” was that it was telling me to spend time more wisely by listing every little thing you do that takes up your lifetime. But we often forget that time is always passing and we are not so conscious about our choice of actions because we don’t see the progress of time in a tangible form. I wanted to show how the activities have different values. Also wanted to express that our life is only given certain time by the word SUM taking up the background.

Last week:

SUM poster_boyoung hwang

Hello I am Boyoung Hwang.

New poster -SUM

My concept is "Blissed"

After reading a story "sum", I realized how present life of mine is full of bliss, and I came to appreciate my life. So, I tried to visualize the feeling of blissed, by types rising up to above where light shines, like angels ascend to heaven.

Old poster -SUM

This is my previous poster. I tried to make shape of sand glass.

Dear all,

As we agreed in class, I invited you to the blog.

Those of you, whose work was not discussed, must post by the end of Friday

Hello, I am_________

My concept__________

First and Second versions of the poster

All of you have to react —describe your impressions, state if the concepts was clearly expressed visually, and give suggestions to each post ASAP by the end of Sunday. I will read your comments and react on Monday. It will give everybody a chance to revise your posters and be prepared for the next class.

Next class, you need to bring your two versions printed b/w as you had them today 

+   Final version : if b/w—printed, if color—digital pdf file and b/w version printed. 

Pay attention to details on the top of the concept, exaggeration, minimalism, and gestalt.

Looking forward to seeing your responses and final posters

Olga